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Before you choose to take me home
There are just some things that you must know

I cannot promise you glory
For how much can these paws do?

I cannot promise you fame
For I am made of nothing special

I cannot promise you money
For I will be the cost of it

I cannot promise you forever joy
For some pain, I will be the source

But for each of these that I cannot do
There are things I can that compensate

I promise you comfort
When times are a fright

I promise you loyalty
At the disposal of my life

I promise you protection
Every hour of every day

I promise you my energy
Whenever you have the time to play

They may not be much
But I hope you understand

If you promise me your heart
I promise you my all
Dedicated to all dogs out there. If you own a dog, or any pet, I think you'll understand. :)

Tell me what you think, please leave a compliment or a criticism. I do like to get better. :D

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All the effort is pointless if you don't believe in yourself.
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SoraIsMyHomeboy Featured By Owner May 14, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
awww, this is adorable X') this is why i love dogs so much
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uruwashiijoshii Featured By Owner May 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I love this poem. I immediately thought of my cat. My mom's dog is a husky, but she thinks of herself more-so as my dog. Even so, she's not really there for me when I'm sad, she just kinda looks at me funny. Her mixed breed loves to lick though so she'll lick and lay with me when I'm sad. It's pretty awesome.

Anyway, beautifully written. I usually critique poetry, and my only suggestion would be to add punctuation in some places, but it takes away from the overall piece, I think, if you do that. It has a sort of flow to it, otherwise. Of course, it always depends on the reader. I know a few people who would like it, regardless of how it was written, with punctuation.
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DSteffi Featured By Owner May 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I see what you mean. I was supposed to add punctuations but I had the feeling it kind of ruined the poem. Thanks for the advice! :D
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uruwashiijoshii Featured By Owner May 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Some will say do it anyway, because it's the right thing to do. Some will say it looks better because they're use to it, and some will agree with me and just say leave it alone. Personally, I think the subject matter is a little soft so the absence of punctuation brings a sort of likeness to mind as though saying, "Be yourself". I critique a lot of poems, so you can listen to me if you want to, but I wouldn't change it. Just tell people that's the way you want it.
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MyLoveForYouEternity Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awww this is cute and that is so what an animal thinks :) When I was young I owned dogs, but now I got 4 cats at my parents place. Which they are always there to comfort you.
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DSteffi Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I know what you mean. Cats may be lazy and demanding a lot of times, but they always come through for us. :)
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MyLoveForYouEternity Featured By Owner May 13, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thats true, or they know when something's wrong :)
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x-GREENDAY-x Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
So cute! :D
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DSteffi Featured By Owner May 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you. :D
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